Tuesday, June 21, 2011

June 22. Twenty-Two Fleshy Words





Skin
completely
covers us with feeling,

a soft gauze to hold us in and

hold back small leakages:

both comforter and comforted.

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9 comments:

Brian Miller said...

this one did not grab me immediately...read it last night and came back this morning...it is very subtle and i think the last 3 lines have potential, they are nice touches, the soft gauze, leakages the last line translates across other things...maybe better non minimalist...

Goat said...

Yes, I've found the greatest challenge of limiting my words to the date of the month is having more to day that that number will allow.
I am glad to hear your thoughts--most helpful, Brian!

Pig Woman said...

So interesting how poets read poetry so different from me. Now as a non-poet who has trouble "getting" poetry, I "got" this one. I read the last line and thought, " why yes, yes, indeed. Uh huh."

My seester really appreciates poets who are brave enough to critique though , Brian. :) She says it is all about becoming a better poet.

So, S, did you really find that heart rock there in the last post or did you plant it? We want to know. ha.

Magpie said...

The photo is really thought provoking. I like the idea of "comforter and comforted".

Craig and Bethany said...

A thin boundary, a property line.

**Love the banter of the commentators!

Goat said...

LOVE the banter! Yes I do! And sorry for the typos in my comment.

AND YES Pig Woman, I found the heart rock exactly as is on the beach by your house. I did not touch a thing. I took the picture and left it. Pretty sure it was just part of a larger rock that if I dug it up could lose all its heartness. Why ruin it...?

Goat said...

Bethany-- "a thin boundary, a property line" --THAT is what the next stanza should contain!

Pig Woman said...

Oh, so it is still there somewhere. I like that. :)

emily wierenga said...

funny, how it can be at the same time, fragile and strong, this skin that holds us in... a tent for our soul. beautiful.